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Jeff Writes a Funny Poem: Part 1, Episode 7g23

My mother's youngest son Jeff (no relation) did compose a poem over 2 years ago. I recovered a handwritten copy this evening whilst sifting through a pile of crap in a room in the 2nd floor of our home (we refer to this room as "the meth lab").

Here is the poem, followed by my analysis and critique:

I'ma get you Sugah-Shane
with your witty gritty big ol' brain
with the attitude that yourself bring
It's like you've stung before you sting

I'll stomp you out you vile snake
Until you've no more bones to break
you'll cry and weep in aweful pain
Yes I'ma get you sugah-shane

Oh shanifer you awful glout
I've caught your scent, I'll seek you out
And then Sh-nuh when you are slain
I'll have got you sugah-shane

My Analysis

The first thing you will note is that this poem is pure genius. Secondly, it is quite violent. Thirdly, of the many hundreds of layers of truth found in this work, the 73rd layer is the most unexpected.

My Critique

First, let me say that I am not above offering a critique to a work of genius. Secondly, what's up with the 3rd line in the first stanza? Thirdly, not enough serpent metaphor.